Blogs/Audio Production

Creation #3

Chill Kendrick I hear what you’re saying (a)

but I don’t think you’re worthy of my conversation (a)

How can’t you understand

that i rose from the pavement (a)

I’m in a penthouse now

but I started in the basement (a)

where the boogey man is

and things that go bump at night hang (b)

drug dealers, shootouts, fist fights, and dice games (b)

Good kid mad city, its nice

that you overcame (b)

mad city made a genius

Jay Z was his name (b)

and you mad at me

because I chill out with my chains (b)

I’ve helped a man before

the man didn’t do the same (b)

so the unity (c)

is foolery (c)

no such thing as you and me (c)

matter fact you and me (c)

you’re gonna need a eulogy (c)

I’m the king of the streets and of the booth (d)

Shit I was hustling when your ass lost your first tooth (d)

Now you think you bad, tryna step to me (e)

That’s like destiny’s child tryna step to B (e)

This piece was created for a project that we had to do in class. The assignment was to choose two artists and create a 16 bars pretending to be them and battle. I picked Jay-Z, this has been one of the best 16 bars I have ever written. I kept the  rhyming simple and finished off with a really good simile to kill Kendrick Lamar.

 

Creation #2: Confused, Tai Jasper

Do I really love you

or just really like the thought of being with you

It’s been so long

I can’t seem to differentiate the two

I don’t what we’re doing anymore

I’m so confused

Can’t tell if you like me

or if I’m just being used

Maybe it’s better I let this go

Maybe I should move on

Maybe you’ll be better of when I’m gone

But you see the problem is

my mind and my heart don’t cooperate

They’re usually at one but when it comes to love,

They tend to separate.

 

This piece conveys my feelings for a certain person. I wrote while being confused and not knowing if that person had real feelings for me. Writing my frustration has definetley helped me cope with the situation. Thanks to this piece, I have started to write everyday to deal with my problems. I used a simple rhyme scheme.

 

Imitation #6: Today Was a Good Day, Ice Cube

Just wakin up in the mornin gotta thank God (a)

I don’t know but today seems kinda odd (a)

No barkin from the dog (b), no smog (b)

And momma cooked a breakfast with no hog (b) (damn)

I got my grub on, but didn’t pig out (c)

Finally got a call from a girl I wanna dig out (c)

(Whassup?) Hooked it up for later as I hit the do’ (d)

Thinkin will I live, another twenty-fo’ (d)

I gotta go (d) cause I got me a drop top (e)

And if I hit the switch, I can make the ass drop (e)

Had to stop (e), at a red light (f)

Lookin in my mirror and not a jacker in sight (f)

And everything is alright (f)

I got a beep from Kim, and she can fuck all night (f)

Called up the homies and I’m askin y’all (g)

Which park, are y’all playin basketball (g)?

Get me on the court and I’m trouble (h)

Last week fucked around and got a triple double (h)

Freakin niggaz everyway (i)  like M.J. (i)

I can’t believe, today was a good day (i) (shit!)

 

In this piece, Ice Cube is telling a story of just a regular day in his city, Compton, when he was younger. However, maybe he is trying to say that this is how every day in Compton was for anybody his age. I think he is speaking to anybody that is not from Compton. He is trying to give them an image of what his city and the people that live in it are like. This piece is confessional because he is just speaking his mind and telling a story of a normal day in Compton. He uses a symbol rhyme scheme. However, he sometimes uses 2 words to make certain bars rhyme. For example, he rhymed “dig out” with “pig out.” Other times he wouldn’t say the words fully to rhyme with other words. For example he rhymed “do’ ” meaning “door” with “twenty-fo’ “ meaning twenty four. This technique also brings more style to the piece. His imagery allows the reader to understand the story better. This song is one of my favorite rap songs from the 90’s. I know all the words to the song. This is why I My favorite era of Rap and R&B is the 90’s. Ice Cube’s flow on this whole track can’t get any smoother. He couldn’t of told the story any better.

Imitation #5: Let’s Talk About Sex, Salt N Pepa

Hot to trot, make any man’s eyes pop

She use what she got to get whatever she don’t got

Fellas drool like fools, but then again they’re only human

The chick was a hit because her body was boomin’

Gold, pearls, rubies, crazy diamonds

Nothin’ she ever wore was ever common

Her dates heads of state, men of taste

Lawyers, doctors, no one was too great for her to get with

Or even mess with, the Prez she says was next on her list

And believe me, you, it’s as good as true

There ain’t a man alive that she couldn’t get next to

She had it all in the bag

So she should have been glad

But she was mad and sad and feelin’ bad

Thinkin’ about the things that she never had

No love, just sex, followed next with a check and a note

That last night was dope, dope

 

Salt N Pepa bring awareness to the idea of safe sex, the positive and negative effects of sex, and the censorship that sex had on society during that time. With saying this, it is safe to say that they are speaking to society and children that not educated well enough on sex. The piece is a critique on the society and the impact sex ahas on it. Like any other rap song, the artists use simple rhyme schemes. It is unique that they never say anyone’s name. Instead, they use pronouns. For example they expressed this idea in the second line of the second verse, “She use what she got to get whatever she don’t.” This piece is dear to my heart. Why? Salt, or I call “Auntie Cheryl,” is my cousin. I don’t get to see her, but when I do, it’s always love. So, to do pick them for an imitation was only right.

Imitation #4: The Message, GrandMaster Flash

My son said, Daddy, I don’t wanna go to school (a)

‘Cause the teacher’s a jerk, he must think I’m a fool (a)

And all the kids smoke reefer (b), I think it’d be cheaper (b)

If I just got a job, learned to be a street sweeper (b)

Or dance to the beat (c) , shuffle my feet (c)

Wear a shirt and tie and run with the creeps (c)

‘Cause it’s all about money (c) , ain’t a damn thing funny (c)

You got to have a con in this land of milk and honey (c)

They pushed that girl in front of the train (d)

Took her to the doctor, sewed her arm on again (d)

Stabbed that man right in his heart (e)

Gave him a transplant for a brand new start (e)

I can’t walk through the park (e) ’cause it’s crazy after dark (e)

Keep my hand on my gun (f) ’cause they got me on the run (f)

I feel like a outlaw (g), broke my last glass jaw (g)

Hear them say “you want some more?” (g)

Livin’ on a see-saw (g)

 

I think Grandmaster Flash is trying to just explain what it was like for him growing up in his neighborhood. I honestly think he is talking to just anyone that wants to listen. The piece is a confessional because he is just expressing how he feels and what he saw growing up in the Bronx. He uses simple rhyming. He keeps all the syllables the same with the words he rhymes with. For example, “reefer,” “cheaper,” and “sweeper” all have two syllables and all rhyme. In other words, he doesn’t break up words to rhyme with others. He also uses imagery to tell the story. This poetic device makes the reader feel like they are actually. He has a unique way of making the reader like they are really being told a story with all the detail he incorporates in his piece.

Critique #5: Words in Your Face

The author speaks about the history of poetry. She enlightens the reader on what the word “poet” means to everyone. She also touches upon how artists and movements in NYC from the 50s to the 80s paved the way for the idea of slam poetry. She believes that slam poetry would not be how it is today without certain artists and movements from this time era. She explains how she wouldn’t know what poets in NYC would be like or sound like. It was the perfect setting for the rest of the world to see how the impact of the movements affected the writers.

Each movement contributed another element to the idea of slam poetry. For example, the Harlem Renaissance allowed poets to express their ideas and opinions on black history. An example of this era in time would be “I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings” by the late and great Langston Hughes. Another perfect example of this idea would be the be the Beat Generation. They were known for combining political activism with art. They express their opinions on society through their work. They spoke on behalf of the working class and the poor. Poetry became a way to express opinions freely. Eventually, slam poetry became a pretty known thing. Hip-Hop rappers even started to attend the events. This type of performance became accepted and poetry became art. This gives the hip hop community credit for also contributing to the shaping of modern poetry and spoken word.

She also mentions the significance and meaning of the word “poet.” She explains how the word can depict stereotypes about artists. She elaborates on how this words gives a view of poets to this day as well. For example, she explains how an average person would think of a poet as a hippie or “someone who writes eloquently with a fluffy feather quill pen.” Unfortunately, this is actually. I too even think of poets like this. I horrible but when I think of a poet, I picture one that would look like a hippie in my head.